When I wake up I'm feelin' something that I never have felt before
Its that something that gets to me, as if the rhythm of your hearts home
Inspired by melodies that take me places I'd never thought I'd go
We find hope in what we believe as if there's reason in make believe
Take me somewhere, where its all green
Where the rivers meet and our hearts collide
Pouring words sheet by sheet, there's meaning in all the sighs
No goodbyes when were moving faster than what we can comprehend
As if its seen in the movies, its all just a dream, when life passes by
Life is the most beautiful thing that we can ever have to hold
Sing it loud as if there's no one watching and you're the only one
Breaking the habit of broken hearts, justifies all the lies
Clear and vivid, I'll paint you a picture of a brand new faultless me
Take me somewhere, where life's surreal
A safe place for my thoughts to hide and it all happens in ideal timing
And the words come to mind as if its all defined
With a pen and paper, it comes from inside
And my words never grow old and die (x2)
Your heart beats in depth next to mine
Pure enough to bring me back
Passionately driven to make this more
With my writing I take my thoughts and bring them to life. I love being able to make music that comes from the soul and truly the only way to do so is with the different uses of rhetoric devices. In particular, metaphors mostly help my writing come to life. With metaphors, I can literally take any boring thought of choice and make it full of life; which is my goal anyways. Music is one of the only ways I can express myself with words. Once sounds are intertwined with such beautiful words, they're cohesively one. Together, these two factors make music a possible metaphorical utopia.
It's always difficult putting words to your wants, dreams, and desires, but you have accomplished it well. as i was reading it seem to be like a thesaurus, the words tended to connect and blend with the same compassion and zeal through out the whole writing. The maximum usage of you whole feeling mixed with the diction learned in class, blended to create a nice passage. The use of more rhetorical devices and explanation of these could be a little deeper on why you decided to write your passage this way. The metaphors and the similes work together to achieve purpose of heart-felt feelings and I was a little unclear about the audience, but overall great job.
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